Week 8 Comments and Feedbacks

1. Feedback in:
If I had to rate the feedbacks and comment I have been getting, I would most likely say it's a 8 on scale of 1-10. The most useful feedbacks I have been using is for my class project. Those feedbacks really points out what's wrong in a specific sentence or paragraph. It is useful to see the mistakes that otherwise are missed by me. Most of the comments are similar, they all are positive and haven't really seen any negative towards stories so I guess that's good.

2. Feedback out:
I think the quality of feedbacks and comments I have been leaving behind are prolly on scale of 7. I think my best feedbacks are on the class projects because I go into details for the things that I like and things that I see that needs to be fixed. When I read stories, I usually don't look for criticism. I read the stories and comment on what I like about it or How they changed it. When I read stories I see so many creative ideas that students incorporate into their stories and defiantly wish that I could recreate something completely different as them.

3. Blog comments:
Reading introduction posts are for sure helpful in connecting with other classmates. I am pretty happy on how my introduction post turned out and how it helped me to connect with other classmates. I loved reading everyone's introduction posts, it helps to find similarities between each other and also learn something new about someone. I liked how many of the classmates introduction involved adventures over the summer. Everyone either went on fun vacation or did internship, which was really easy to connect to.

4. Looking forward:
In future feedbacks and comments, I would pay attention to not only the context of the person's story but also to the grammar. I give detail feedbacks during class projects mostly because it asks us to do so. I think giving honest feedbacks is a good criticism, as it helps the author work on their writing styles that could only benefit them in the future.

I choose this pic to show the importance of feedback. No matter the type of feedback it is, it will help you reach higher towards your goal. Feedbacks will help you fix your mistakes and help you from making a possible same mistakes again.

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Week 8 Reading and Writing

Looking back at all the assignments and readings for this class, I think I enjoyed both Ramayana and Mahabharata. They both were similar in many aspects. I think writing out reading notes have been very helpful for me. I wrote about that interested me the most and how I would recreate a story about that specific scene. In my every story, I have used one of the topics that I talked about in that week's reading notes. I think the biggest accomplishment for me as been coming up with stories every week. I use similar settings but just change up the context. As for my class project, I don't think it is really coming along. I need to work on it or completely change it up. I am doing Harry Potter related class project, but there are many difficulties with tying it all together.

Ganges

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This is one of my favorite pictures used for the story. It represent beauty of the river Ganges. It shows how vibrant and colorful the river is. It shows that it holds a religious value for Hinduism, as it is surrounded by many temples. Ganges is used for many ceremonies in India mostly for the people who are dead to give them peace.

Looking forward, I would like to work on my class project efficiently. I hope to keep coming up with creative ideas for the stories and projects. Slowly, I hope to improve on my writing style. I hope to read more folk stories in future, I enjoyed reading them at the beginning of the class. I hope to use dialogues in my future class project stories instead of just writing the story out. 

Week 7 Story: Krishna and Yudishthira's Afterlife

Ganges on a clam day 

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Once the battle between the Pandavas and Kauravas was over, Krishna's work here on earth was done. He helped Arjuna fight his own blood for justice. It was time for Pandavas and Krishna to leave earth. Out of all five brothers only Yudishthira agreed to go with Krishna as the rest of the brother claimed they still have to finish up some of their business here on earth.

Krishna and Yudishthira decides to get going on the journey to the river Ganges. They planned on uniting with their past loved ones by walking into the holy river. Once they reached to the river, they performed mantra with the sage they brought from Hastinapur. Suddenly, Ganges appeared from the river. 

Ganges: Why have you came to disturb me?

Krishna: We are here to depart this land and unite with our fellow friends and family.

Ganges: Who are you all?

Sage: This is Krishna and Yudishthira, who have fought in the great war and now are here to leave their body behind.

Ganges: Oh, so you are the great heroes! Before you walk into me I will unite you to your loved ones for the last time as you may or may not see them ever again.

The waves started getting bigger, there was lightning and thunderstorm and the wind was rustling the leaves off the trees. Krishna and Yudishthira saw their family's ghost walk out of the river. They saw them for few seconds as it was time for them to go. First Krishna walked in, while following his father. Later, Yudishthira walked in following his brothers. Slowly, they both were out of sight and everything went back to normal as if nothing had ever happened here. 

Krishna walked into clouds full of light and shine. He reunited with other gods, as he took his original form of Lord Vishnu. He was happy to see Krishna's family and he looked for Yudishthira, but he was nowhere to be found. On the other side, Yudishthira walked into a different world, where he was blood river on the side and skulls everywhere. He saw Kauravas, whom he hated as they were the reason behind most of his misery. He prayed to lord Yama and he appeared, he asked to be with his wife Draupadi and his companions who was on his side. Lord Yama saw his loyalty to people who did him right and vanished all the illusion. Yudishthira was taken back to Ganges, where his soul was cleansed and sent to heaven. He united with Lord Vishnu, his wife, and all the others who he knew from earth. 

Bibliography: PDE Mahabharata

Author's Note:

Originally Lord Krishna was killed by a hunter, who had mistaken him for a gazelle and shot him in his right foot. The arrow hit a spot that injured him mortally, killing him. I did not like the way he was killed as it was so easy and not dramatic. I made him choose his death in this story and united him with Yudishthira. They both died died together in more of a dramatic way. I also wanted to include Ganges in the story as she is the holy river, where most of the after life rituals are performed. I also incorporated some of the similar scenes from Mahabharata like the heaven and hell scene. I ended the story in a similar way as the original. Yudishthira is sent to hell, but he is then later sent to heaven for his loyalty and his good deeds for human kind. 

Reading Notes: Mahabharata Part D

This week's part D reading was intense. The Pandavas lost many of their family members and also the people they loved from the big battle. It was interesting that most of the Pandavas brothers dies by arrows. It was also soothing to listen to lord Krishna's wisdom to Arjuna. The wisdom that he gives can still be used in today's lifestyle. There was also one strong on bathing in Ganges to forget the sorrow of loved one's death, which still relates to today's society as when someone dies in Hindu family they are suppose to take the ashes and perform rituals to clean ones body and let the ashes go in the holy water. It is said that if such rituals are performed, the person who dies is at peace. It was shocking to see Krishna die at the end just by one of the solider's shooting an arrow to his foot. The arrows hits a spot that wounds him mortally. The hunter also thought he saw a gazelle and not krishna that's why he shot him, which resembles many stories of when king shoots a deer in Ramayana and also of a Brahmin who was disguised in deer and shot.

Bibliography: PDE Mahabharata

Krishna shot in his foot by a hunter

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Reading Notes: Mahabharata Part C

Krishna and Arjuna in the battle field 

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There were many incidents that were similar to the other Indian epic, Ramayana. This part also had Pandavas exiled in the forests, but for twelve years. They almost face the similar troubles of a guy trying to steal Draupadi, their wife and facing Rakshas. I like how it addressed the issue of Arjuna going to Himalayas to mediate, where he gains boon to wish for weapons. One story that I enjoyed was about all the brothers trying to get water, but they are stooped by a voice of god Dharma, a god of wisdom and knowledge. All the brother disobey's his saying, therefore all die from drinking water but Yudhishthira. After he answers all the questions to the riddles, he is granted two boons to help. where he brings back his brothers and ask for them to be unrecognizable for one year. The story basically had the moral of being patience and using your knowledge when faced with struggles to get through that phase. The results of patience and taking tasks slowly, but wisely can be successful. I like at the end how they added Krishna into the battle and how they also mentioned Gita, a holy book for Hindus. 

Bibliography: PDE Mahabharata by R.K.Narayan

Week 6 story: Reincarnation of Draupadi

Before Draupadi was born she was a reincarnation of Nalayani, who was a women happily married to her husband Rishi Maudgalya. They were know to be the most loving couple in the universe. When they got married they vowed to be with each other for all the seven cycles of rebirths. Rishi was into meditation and he wanted to be one of the best Rishi's out there so one day he went into the mountains to meditate. He spent almost a week by just meditations, until finally Shankar came down to visit him.

Shankar: Why have you summoned me?

Maudgalya: I want to be the best Rishi, who can get powers through meditation.

Shankar: Why you wish for such, only the gods can have such power.

Maudgalya: I will only use the power for the common good, help people around by spreading positivity. If you see me use it for evil, you can avenge me.

Shankar: I will only be able to grant you such a boon, if only you leave your loving wife forever.

Maudgalya: WHY? We have vowed to live together for 7 cycles of rebirth. We have been together since the very beginning. She is my destiny.

Shankar: I did not say this was going to be easy, if you want power then you must earn it.

As Shankar was almost about to leave. He hears Maudgalya shout.

Maudgalya: I WILL DO IT!

Therefore, Shankar granted him the boon. However, Maudgalya certainly felt guilty of such deeds. He meditated more to get power. Until He was so immense in meditation, he finally forgot his wife Nalayani. 

Nalayani looked for her husband for days. The forest was so big and since Maudgalya was meditating in a secret spot, she never found him. Nalayani spent rest of her life in sorrows, until finally one day one of the gods visited her and asked what she wanted. This is where Nalayani asked god for a happy marriage life, where she will always be taken care off and never left alone. As always there was a twist, god did not just give her one loyal and caring husbands, but five. She was assured that in her next birth cycle, she would be queen Draupadi and she will marry five princes.

Bibliography: PDE Mahabharata

Rishi meditating to get power

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Author's note:
Originally this story starts with the Rishi wanting to focus more on meditations and Tapas, giving up his wife and life. His wife Nalayani gets upsets as she is not satisfied with his love and want him to be there for her throughout the many cycles of rebirths. However, her husband just leave and she starts meditating, where she gets visited by god, who grants her five husbands because she says I want my husband five times. I wanted to make it more interesting, on why Rishi wanted to leave her and how he is granted the boon of power. I changed up the story by flipping the point of view.

Reading Notes: PDE Mahabharata Part B

For this part of the reading I liked the story of Draupadi, how she was married to a man, who never loved her so she prayed until one of the gods promised her five husbands, even though she only wanted one. Then later, she is shown to become a wife of five Pandavas brothers, which was shocking. Later in the epics there comes to dice battles, which is one of the significant battle of Mahabharata as the oldest Pandava brother Yudhishthria looses everything over a con game, he even ends up losing his wife. Then later when the king finds out he grants Draupadi two boons for all the troubles she went through, where she only used one to exile to forest with Pandavas. I was thinking about re-creating a story based off the dice game. Maybe come up with a different game, where they do not give away Draupadi.

Bibliography: PDE Mahabharata 

Draupadi's fate due to the gambling game 

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